Hello, thanks for applying! Your application looks great so far, we just have some requests before finishing our decision, if you don't mind.
We'd like clarification, or rather, some expansion on Helena's personality as it isn't giving us a particularly clear view of her nature overall. The section seems to focus mostly on that defining aspect of her character and her personality towards Sarah but we're having a hard time seeing the more general personality she generally gives to others. Basically, we're curious how she acts towards people who aren't Sarah (eg: people who she interacts with that don't know her well, people that haven't seen her killing or the way she reacts to Sarah, people who are complete strangers passing by her on the street). A short paragraph is more than fine if you can sum up her up in that little since we're actually asking mostly for that boring summary of what they're like at "first glance" before getting into their defining traits.
And, if you don't mind writing a second first person sample to reflect the above request, it would be appreciated! Your first person sample is excellent in showing her character and what is described in the app already, so we just need something to at and compare to the additional info part. Don't worry too much about the length requirements on this one, either, just enough to get it clearly across.
I hope this request makes sense, but if you have any questions, please don't hesitate to respond here with them! Looking forward to your reply!
ADDITIONAL REQUEST
We'd like clarification, or rather, some expansion on Helena's personality as it isn't giving us a particularly clear view of her nature overall. The section seems to focus mostly on that defining aspect of her character and her personality towards Sarah but we're having a hard time seeing the more general personality she generally gives to others. Basically, we're curious how she acts towards people who aren't Sarah (eg: people who she interacts with that don't know her well, people that haven't seen her killing or the way she reacts to Sarah, people who are complete strangers passing by her on the street). A short paragraph is more than fine if you can sum up her up in that little since we're actually asking mostly for that boring summary of what they're like at "first glance" before getting into their defining traits.
And, if you don't mind writing a second first person sample to reflect the above request, it would be appreciated! Your first person sample is excellent in showing her character and what is described in the app already, so we just need something to at and compare to the additional info part. Don't worry too much about the length requirements on this one, either, just enough to get it clearly across.
I hope this request makes sense, but if you have any questions, please don't hesitate to respond here with them! Looking forward to your reply!